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The Process of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram displays the procedure
of
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 producing
Pu-erh
 Raw and Ripe
Tea
.
Overall
, it's a linear process consisting of 4 main stages: Preparation of leaves, Compression, and Fermenting and Storing. Starting with making Ripe
tea
, the specific leaves are heated on a pan.
Secondly
, they are rolled with the help of an instrument and
layed
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laid
 directly under the sun to dry,
thus
 making Loose raw
tea
. It is
then
 fermented by using a
mold
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 to help produce Loose Ripe
Tea
 which is
then
 compressed by using the assistance of
an
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equipment to manufacture
Pu-erh
 Ripe
Tea
. To produce
Pu-erh
 Raw
Tea
 start with the same steps, frying the leaves and rolling them for it to dry under the sun to make Loose Raw
Tea
. But it is
then
 compressed with an instrument to make
Pu-erh
 Raw
Tea
.
As well as
, it is stored somewhere for a long time for the
tea
 to age, to produce the final product the Vintage
Pu-erh
 Raw
Tea
.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay displays a basic understanding of the processes involved in making both types of Pu-erh tea. However, it lacks complex sentence structures and variety in linking words, which is essential for a higher score in the coherence and cohesion criterion. Consider using a mix of simple and complex sentences, and include a range of discourse markers to show the relationship between ideas more effectively.
task achievement
You have addressed the task only partially. To achieve a higher score, ensure you provide a more detailed description of each stage of the process. It's also important to compare the processes where relevant. Provide specifics on how the processes differ and any similarities they might have.

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