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The graphs below show average monthly temperature and rainfall in two places in South Africa.

The graphs below show average monthly temperature and rainfall in two places in South Africa.
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The given bar charts illustrate the standard amount of
rainfall
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,
while
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 the line diagrams depict the monthly
temperature
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 of two different places in South Africa namely Cape Town and
Upington
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 yearly.
Overall
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, as illustrated by the graph, the figure for average
rainfall
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 in
Upington
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 from
January
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 to April and from October to December was the highest in the year.
By contrast
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,
Upington
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 witnessed the opposite trend.
Besides
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 that, as clearly seen from the line chart, the lowest and highest temperatures of
Upington
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 are five and ten degrees higher respectively, compared to Cape Town. In terms of
Upington
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, it is evident that the record of
rainfall
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 climbed significantly from 125 to 175
millimeters
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millimetres
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 and reached its peak in March.
However
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, from April to September, the data for
rainfall
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 dropped rapidly by 100
units
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 and hit the lowest point simultaneously at 15
millimeters
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millimetres
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 in July before rising slightly in the
last
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 three months and ending at 80
units
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.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of maximum and minimum temperatures were 35 and 20 degrees in
January
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 before plummeting to 22 and 5 degrees independently in July. Regarding Cape Town, there is no doubt that the figure for rain that falls in
this
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 area climbed up gradually from 5
units
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 in
January
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 and reached the top in June at 100
millimeters
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millimetres
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.
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, it witnessed a downward trend of 80
units
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 between July and December.
Besides
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 that, the maximum
temperature
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 experienced a fluctuating trend. So do the minimum one. The record of maximum
temperature
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 slumped down from
January
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 to June by five
units
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 before climbing up by three
units
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 from September to December.
On the other hand
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, the lowest
temperature
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 witnessed the same tendency as the highest one
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides, on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, temperature, upington, january, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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