The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart illustrates the different
percentage
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percentages
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of families' income spent weekly in 1968 and 2018 in one country. Overview, In 1968,
majority
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the majority
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of the population's
incomes
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income
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were
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was
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spent on food
while
the lowest
is
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was
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on
fuel
and power category.
On the other hand
, people in 2018 spent their income mostly on leisure activities whilst, they spent the least on
fuel
and personal goods. It is noticeable that in 1968, the biggest spending
were
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mostly on diet which marked 35% of it.
Meanwhile
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the second biggest spending
were
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was
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on housing and clothing and footwear, both were equal
of
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to
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10%
from
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of
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their wages.
In Contrast
, wages were less likely spent on
fuel
and power
as
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with just over 5% of their money that
were
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was
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paid on that. In 2018, Citizens were mostly
engange
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engage
engaged
in leisure activities
which
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and
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over 20% of their payments went to
that
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those
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activities.
This
was the highest spending on that year. Following that, housing was
also
the second biggest investment in 2018 with almost 20% of funds spent on that category. The population
also
spent the least on
fuel
category and personal goods, both
were not even reach
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did not even reach
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5%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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