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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph gives information about how much
time
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 males and females spent relaxing in 5 employment categories, counted in hours in a two-year period from 1998 to 1999. In general, what stands out from the graph is that
men
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 enjoyed more hours of leisure moment per
week
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 than women in 3 out of 5 sectors.
However
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, only figures for females were shown in 2 factors: employed part-
time
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 and housewives. Another interesting point is that the unemployed and retired have the highest number of leisure
time
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 spent for both genders. In detail, in the full-
time
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 employment status,
men
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 had about 45 of relaxation per
week
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, as opposed to 38 for women.
On the other hand
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, no data is given for the part-
time
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 employed
men
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.
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, the housewives had 50 of their spare
time
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 a
week
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. With respect to the unemployed, the residents spent much
time
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 on recreation; males accounted for more than 80 per
week
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 and little less than 80 a
week
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 for females. The amount of occasions retired
men
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 and women spent on recreational activities was similar to that of the unemployed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • disparity
  • illustrates
  • depicts
  • comparison
  • significant
  • notable
  • approximately
  • contrast
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • analyze
  • evaluate
  • data
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