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The bar charts show education data related to young adults aged 15 years old in 10 different countries in 2015. The first chart shows in which countries adolescents do the most homework in terms of the hours per week. The second chart shows the nations that scored the best on an international science test. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts show education data related to young adults aged 15 years old in 10 different countries in 2015. The first chart shows in which countries adolescents do the most homework in terms of the hours per week. The second chart shows the nations that scored the best on an international science test. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first chart illustrates the number of
hours
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 spent by 15-year-old adolescents on homework in various
countries
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 in 2015. The second bar chart highlights the top
countries
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 with scores recorded in science measured against international standards by the same age group in the same year. In general, what stands out from the graph is that
Finland
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 students spent the least
hours
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 on their assignments compared to the others.
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, they got significantly the best scores on the international science test. In detail, Among the top
countries
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 that spent
time
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 on doing homework,
Finland
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 spent the least
time
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 2.8
hours
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,
while
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 South Korean and Japanese students averaged 2.9 and 4.3
hours
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, respectively. The average
time
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 in the rest of the
countries
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 fell between five to seven
hours
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,
while
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 Italy spent the longest
time
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 (8.6
hours
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) doing assignments, over four times longer than
Finland
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. With respect to science scores, teenagers in
Finland
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 scored the highest with a mean score of 568, despite spending the least amount of
time
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 doing their homework. Aside from Hong Kong-China which recorded 543, adolescents in the following six nations averaged 530 points. The lowest score was recorded by the Netherlands and the USA, with 518 and 516 points. Interestingly, Italy did not qualify to be within the top ten
countries
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, countries, finland, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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