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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.
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The pie chart provides data about the proportions of
graduates
 from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.
Overall
, almost
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half of
graduates
 studied service industries and
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 Industry. As can clearly be seen, almost
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half of
graduates
(49.3 per
cent
) went to study service industries and manufacturing Industry. The
proportion
 of
graduates
 who studied service industries was 33 per
cent
 and the
proportion
 of
graduates
 who studied manufacturing industry was 16.3 per
cent
. 14.7 per
cent
 of
graduates
 chose to study education and 12.1 per
cent
 of
students
 studied politics and government. The percentages of
students
 who studied transportation and warehousing and science and technology were quite similar. 7.8 per
cent
 of
students
 studied transportation and warehousing,
whereas
 7.3 per
cent
 of
students
 studied science and technology. The percentages of
students
 who studied charity and sport were
also
 identical. The
proportion
 of
students
 who studied charity was 0.3 per
cent
 and the percentage of
students
 who studied sport was only 0.1 per
cent
, which was the lowest
proportion
 compared to other majors.
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