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The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.

The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.
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The pie chart provides data about the proportions of
graduates
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 from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors.
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half of
graduates
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 studied service industries and
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 Industry. As can clearly be seen, almost
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half of
graduates
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(49.3 per
cent
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) went to study service industries and manufacturing Industry. The
proportion
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 of
graduates
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 who studied service industries was 33 per
cent
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 and the
proportion
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 of
graduates
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 who studied manufacturing industry was 16.3 per
cent
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. 14.7 per
cent
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 of
graduates
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 chose to study education and 12.1 per
cent
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 of
students
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 studied politics and government. The percentages of
students
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 who studied transportation and warehousing and science and technology were quite similar. 7.8 per
cent
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 of
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 studied transportation and warehousing,
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 7.3 per
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 of
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 studied science and technology. The percentages of
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 who studied charity and sport were
also
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 identical. The
proportion
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 of
students
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 who studied charity was 0.3 per
cent
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 and the percentage of
students
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 who studied sport was only 0.1 per
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, which was the lowest
proportion
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 compared to other majors.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, cent, proportion, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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