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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The proportion of
water
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 used for agricultural, industrial and domestic
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purpose
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 in six distinct parts of the world is delineated in the pie charts given. As
it
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apply
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can be seen from the graphs, in most regions, the consumption of
water
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 is occupied mainly by agricultural
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purpose
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purposes
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While
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 the use of
water
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 in industry registered higher than domestic one in North
America
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, Europe and South East
Asia
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, that was the lowest data in 3 remained parts. To be more precise, most
water
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 used in North
America
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 and Europe was consumed for industrial
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purpose
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purposes
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, respectively recorded at 48% and 53%. These two regions continued to share the same pattern when
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water
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the water
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 rate in agricultural use came to the
second,
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roughly one-third. Even though the
water
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 consumed for domestic use is
also
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 the lowest figure, under one-tenth, in
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
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, its highest data differed from the two mentioned areas. Agriculture consumed most
water
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 in
this
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 region at an outstanding rate, 81%. Regarding there remained areas, they are completely similar in
water
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 consumption trends. Agriculture took up the most
water
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 used in South
America
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, Africa,
Central
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and Central
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Asia
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, registered at 71%, 84% and 88%
in
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respective
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respectively
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Conversely
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,
water
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 used for industrial
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purpose
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purposes
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 witnessed the lowest in these three places, one-tenth in South
America
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, 7% in Africa and one-twentieth in Central
Asia
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, purpose, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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