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It is a good thing for the senior managers to have better salaries than other workers in a company or organization? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#managers #salaries #workers #company #organization
The issue of
managers
 getting better wages than those who are rated lower than them has sparked a lot of debate.
While
 some think the success of a firm is based on
them
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 others think they have
less
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fewer
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pyhsical
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physical
 activities to do so that they can
derseve
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deserve
 the money
the
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they
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 earn. In
this
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i
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I
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 will explain why
i
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I
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 believe leaders
all
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and all
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 workers must be paid the same. On the one hand,
managers
 are believed to be the people key to
success
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the success
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 of the company. They
insure
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ensure
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 day to day running of the company goes well.
For example
,
handing
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when handing
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 out
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shifts
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shift
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shifts
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, if the boss makes a
shift
 of people with low
knoledge
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knowledge
 or experience, the
shift
 might not go well leading to losses for the company. In
adddition
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addition
, they
also
 need to keep track of how workers are behaving,
perfoming
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performing
 and cooperating during shifts.
Therefore
, they carry huge risks on their back, keeping track of progress, surely they should be credited with an extra token.
On the other hand
, they have very flexible working conditions.
Managers
 tend to work a few
days
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than
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 those on a lower level.
For Instance
, at Inpost Lublin, out of the 6 working
days
, they would be asked on
shift
 3 times. On top of that, all their off and leave
days
 are paid for
hence
 those
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apply
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on
production
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the production
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 side
they
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apply
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get paid hourly without
also
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apply
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wages if they can not come to the
shift
. It is better to pay
lucratively
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apply
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a worker on a
six day
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six-day
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shift
. In conclusion,
managers
holds
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 the key to business growth but the number of
days
 they work are fewer to make them deserve a better salary than others. I firmly disagree
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the fact that they should earn higher.
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coherence cohesion
The essay provides a basic structure but lacks a clear and logical progression of ideas. The writer should aim to create clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea supported by specific examples. The introduction and conclusion are crucial for summarizing the arguments and stating the writer's position clearly.
task achievement
The response to the task is incomplete because it does not fully address all parts of the question. The writer needs to fully develop their argument, presenting a more balanced view with nuanced reasoning and comprehensive examples relevant to the topic. A clear thesis statement is necessary to convey the main idea effectively.
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