The diagrams show the floor plans for a trade conference
The maps illustrate how a trade
conference
changed after some major refurbishment between 2009 and 2010.
Overall
, the most noticeble
improvements were the relocation and rearrangement of most areas Correct your spelling
noticeable
in
the map. Change preposition
on
In addition
, the meeting room is
demolished in the 2010 plan.
In 2009, The Wrong verb form
was
conference
hall
was located in the left part of the conference
, with only two line
of seats. Change to a plural noun
lines
However
, in 2010 it replaced the exhibition area in the Correct your spelling
southeast
south-east
, with 4 extra seating lines and the stage was placed next to the entrance to the balcony. Meanwhile, Correct your spelling
southeast
new
exhibition area with considerably more display stands was erected Correct article usage
a new
in
the left side in 2010, taking Change preposition
on
place
of the Correct article usage
the place
conference
hall
and the meeting rooms.
In terms of the right side, the balcony was renovated with the addition of a lounge. In addition
, the refreshment on the upper side of the plan was relocated to the right part, perpendicular to the conference
hall
and next to the balcony. Finally
, the refreshment which was oposite
the Correct your spelling
opposite
conference
hall
in 2009 was converted to the registration, whereas
the entrances to the conference
remained the same throughout the time frame.Submitted by phanhuyhoang278 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words conference, hall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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