The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
The bar
chart
presents
percentage
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the percentage
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who watch reality shows and four different age groups by men and women in Australia. The
amount
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number
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of females
ages
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aged
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in
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45+ selected reality shows. But the
least
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last
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position stayed
people
who watch reality shows at 16-24
ages
. Significantly more women watched TV programmes than men. We could see a visible rise process in the
chart
. Many
people
could
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can
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watch TV in any age
categories
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category
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.
Also
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Also,
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there are given the
chart
, the percentage who watch game shows.
However
, the information of male and female watchers has
same
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the same
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position. Only 69%
people
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of people
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from
chart
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the chart
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are more actively involved in categories compared with the 25-34
ages
. The same stance
are
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is
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35-44
ages
in comparison with 2% In general, the older age group are noticeably more involved in
the
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apply
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TV programmes than younger
people
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, ages, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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