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The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the number of tourists visiting Country X from various parts of the world and the table displays the income of different businesses in the nation in 2007 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart shows the proportion of
travelers
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travellers
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 touring Country X from several places in the world,
while
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 the table presents a comparison of the profit of variant businesses in the country in 2007 and 2008.
Overall
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, China and Japan were the most popular countries to go to, and the annual earnings of hotels and resorts
was
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 the highest during the period.
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, in 2007 the most popular cities to visit were Japan and China with about 3.000 visitors, which was approximately 2.000 higher than Australia, and almost 50% greater than the other two countries.
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, a drop below 2.000
travelers
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travellers
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 in 2008 and Australia had decreased only a tiny small portion. Despite
this
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, the figures were still bigger than for the remaining two cities.
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, the annual return of
variety
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a variety
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tourism
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of tourism
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 activities shows that hotels and resorts were considerably higher, about 3.5 million than the other three industries.
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, in 2008 a significant fall was three times lower than previous years.
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