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AI based systems as a solution to more sustainable energy supply

#systems #energy
Human civilization heavily relies on the existence of
energy
.
For instance
, it powers
airplanes
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 to transport people and goods thousands of miles away in less than a day, allowing us to trade goods and even
to
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rekindle with our loved ones.
However
, escalating
energy
 consumption has resulted in climate change issues that could impact humanity and threaten future generations. Several preventive and corrective actions have been taken,
such
 as the use of Artificial Intelligence technology, or AI in short, to preserve
energy
 supply and manage its consumption.
This
 essay will explore what AI is and the example of its global
implementation
 in the context of
energy
 supply conservation.
Data
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The data
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center
 is a facility with computing infrastructure, storage, and backup power (Hogan, 2022). It is designed to ensure the continuous operation of computer systems and
the
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stored
data
. In 2022,
data
center
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 contributed 1-1.3% of global electricity use, which was estimated around 240-340 TWh (Rozite et al., 2023).
This
 figure is predicted to keep rising, until 1.86% in 2030 (Koot & Wijnhoven, 2021). Google, as one of
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 giants in the 21st century which started as a search engine, has evolved their business with diverse products and services. The growing line of business has led them to expand their
data
center
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 facilities. As of 2023, they have been owning 24
data
centers
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 spread across the world
while
 innovating to make significant improvements towards their efficiency. The
company
 started implementing a neural network in 2014, trained to mimic cognitive
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 via interactions between artificial neurons. The neural network would search for patterns and interactions between features to automatically generate a best-fit model (Gao, 2014).
Until in
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 2016, the
company
 introduced DeepMind AI which aimed to improve the previous system’s utility. As per
report
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 by Google, the
company
 has managed to reduce the amount of
energy
 used for cooling by up to 40
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 after the
implementation
 of machine learning. The
company
 collects historical
data
 from thousands of sensors within the
data
centers
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 and uses it to train an ensemble of deep neural networks (Gao, 2014). It explains that the research
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comparing predicted vs actual PUE has a mean absolute of 0.004 and
standard
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 deviation of 0.005. The mean absolute measures the average absolute differences between observed and predicted values in a dataset, where the closest
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score is to 0, indicates higher accuracy of the prediction model (Jierula et al., 2021). Meanwhile, the standard deviation indicates how dispersed the values in a
data
 set are from the average value, where the closest
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score is
to
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0,
suggests
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 that the
data
 points are less
variative
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variation
 and close to the average (Barde & Barde, 2012). Based on the
data
, it is proven that the
implementation
 of machine learning in Google
data
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is
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not only
benefit
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 the environment
,
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 but
also
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 a high accuracy in predicting
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usage trends. In conclusion, the
implementation
 of AI-based systems in various sectors has proven to successfully revolutionize
energy
 preservation and contribute to a more sustainable
energy
 supply. Extensive training
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 the
data
 set will be needed to produce a more humane model, and it will not occur in a short period. We can certainly continue harnessing the power of AI,
while
 hand in hand focusing on the goal of reducing carbon emissions.
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