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The maps below show the changes occurade to a town named Willingtone 1780, 1860, 2000

The maps below show the changes occurade to a town named Willingtone 1780, 1860, 2000
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The map illustrates the modification of Willingtone from 1780 to 2000.
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, after 3 states Willingtone became a rural area with many constructions and buildings. As can be seen in the map, there
is
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 a lot of changes during 1780-1860. The number of homes and villages increased. Meanwhile, count of woods and farms declined in that time. The most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 is that
,
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 there is
new
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a new
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constructions
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construction
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 road from the
river
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 and
bridge
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a bridge
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 over the
river
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. Maps show a lot of updates between 1860 and 2000.
Such
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 as, all
trees
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the trees
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was
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were
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 chopped down and
build
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built
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their
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apply
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two schools and three sports fields.
Also
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 farms
was
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were
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dimolished
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demolished
 at that period. The
river
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run
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runs
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 through
new
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newly
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 erected facilities named wetland for birds.
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, in 2000 was opened up shops which located alongside with
river
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. The account of homes, roads and villages
rise
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rose
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 by 2 times more in 2000 than in 1860.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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