Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, many undergraduate
students
are willing to gain knowledge beyond their main subjects
. Despite this
, others say that it is more crucial for them to pay their all attention and time
on
their own major. Change preposition
to
This
has been a debatable case, however
, in my opinion, students
have their
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rights
to explore and learn other Fix the agreement mistake
right
subjects
.
Primarily, focus on learn
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learning
main
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the main
subjects
making the students
get easily in-depth knowledge and understanding rather than learning various subjects
at the same time
. For instance
, an undergraduate
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undergraduate students
an undergraduate student
students
with specific major
: law, doctoral, and psychology will learn only Fix the agreement mistake
majors
subjects
related to their courses, they have a minimum chance to explore more because they learn a specific field of knowledge. Moreover
, once they graduate, they can easily become expert in the field that they focus to learn
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on learning
For example
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can become a lawyer and only a bachelor of psychology Correct pronoun usage
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that
can become a psychologist.
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apply
Nevertheless
, every student has their own right to choose what they want to learn. In my belief, as long as they can be responsible for their choice, it would be no issue if they want to explore beyond their main major. Responsible means the additional subjects
they choose to learn does
not disturb their activities and class schedules. It Correct subject-verb agreement
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is
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also
occurred
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other activities or Change preposition
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extracurricular
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extracurriculars
which are
they are joining. Verb problem
that
For example
, joining organizations or competitions that are not related with
their study. Despite Change preposition
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this
, it will also
benefit them in increasing their soft skills.
In conclusion, i
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not strictly Verb problem
do
defends
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defend
for
an opinion saying that undergraduate Change preposition
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students
are more important to give all their time
and attention to study and are not allowed to learn other subjects
. However
, as long as they can manage their time
, it can be possible for them to take and learn other subjects
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