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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the various
type
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types
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 of
people
 who
attend
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attended
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 the evening course at an adult education centre in the year 2009 and
also
 the pie chart tells about the ages of
people
 who attended these
programme
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programmes
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.
According to
 the
chart
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chart,
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 the
people
 who attend the language program
has
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have
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 the highest among the other
programmes
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programs
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 like Drama, Painting , Sculpture and Language. The
women
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number of women
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 who participated in
Sculpture
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the Sculpture
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 course is below 10 is less when compared to the
men
 .In painting,the number of
men
attend
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attending
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25 is equal to
women
 30 as-well-as in
language
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the language
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 class 40
women
 and 20
men
 have
came
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 to class .
women
loves
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love
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 attending drama class
that is
 of nearly 20
women
 and 10
men
 have attended the evening drama course
Overall
 the
age
 between 50
or
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and
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 above
peoples
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people
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 have
attend
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attended
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the
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apply
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evening courses in the year 2009 ,
however
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however,
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 the
age
people
 between 30 to 39 is less when
comparing
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compared
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 to the
people
 of
age
 between 40 to 49. the least amount was under the
age
 of 20 at the
precentage
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percentage
 of 5 in the year 2009
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, women, men, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance
  • adult education centre
  • participants
  • demographics
  • evening courses
  • language course
  • art course
  • participation rates
  • gender distribution
  • age group
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • popularity
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