The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009.
The spending amount of money in five highly developed countries in 2009 is illustrated in the bar chart. On the whole, it can be clearly seen that housing made up the biggest expenditure
while
health care and clothing shared a similar account. As
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illustrated in the picture, domestic budgeting constituted more than 20
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in all countries. America, the highest country, witnessed more than a-fourth. The United Kingdom saw just below 25
percent
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Japan and Canada were 22 and 21
percent
respectively. Medical treatment and fashion spending, in comparison, never reached a tenth. Health care in the US, the highest percentage compared to other countries, consisted of roughly eight
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. Canada and Japan share
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approximately four
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,
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the UK was the lowest, only one
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.
In addition
, clothing expenditure in Canada, Britain, Japan, and the US made up around seven, six, four, and three
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respectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • shares
  • percentage
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • factors
  • spending patterns
  • living standards
  • priorities
  • trends
  • bar chart
  • economic
  • cultural influences
  • household budget
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