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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009.
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The graph depicts the spending shares of five important fields in some of the global north countries, which are the United
States
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, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. The five categories that are described in the chart are food, housing, transportation, health care, and clothing. Starting with food, Japan ranks first with over
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20% and the least is the United
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.
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, the United
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 has their highest expenditure on housing with more than 25%, being the top in the category, followed by the United Kingdom ranging somewhere below 25%. Going over to transportation, Canada is first on the chart with a share of 20% and Japan is left with 10% shares only. Moving on to health care, the United
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 leads the leaderboard with around 7% shares, but the United Kingdom the least with slightly over 0%.
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 but not least, Canada is over the top with clothing in over 5% and the United
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 the least with below 5%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • shares
  • percentage
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • factors
  • spending patterns
  • living standards
  • priorities
  • trends
  • bar chart
  • economic
  • cultural influences
  • household budget
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