The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.

The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.
The chart displays the difference between male and female's amount of free
time
during the different life stages. These bars
also
shows
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the comparison
beetween
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between
the diverse employments that both
sex's
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has
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.
Overall
, those who are employed,
full
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full-time
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time
or
part
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part-time
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time
,
has
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a much higher free
time
. Though
,
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there are no male statistics on those who are being employed
part
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part-time
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time
or who stay at home, we can see that there is a big jump between those with traditional jobs and those without. Females that are working
full
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time
and
part
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part-time
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time
tend to have
lower
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leisure
time
with approximately 40 to 50
hours
a week.
Whereas
women who are unemployed or retired
has
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a higher amount of leisure
time
with a leap of around 80
hours
per week.
On the other hand
, the male chart
demonstates
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demonstrates
a significant leap from men who
works
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full
time
, with around 40 to 50
hours
to men who are employed or retired within a range of 80
hours
per week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours with synonyms.
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