The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.

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The chart displays the difference between male and female's amount of free

time

during the different life stages. These bars

also

shows

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the comparison

beetween

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between

the diverse employments that both

sex's

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sexes

sex

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has

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have

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Overall

, those who are employed,

full

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full-time

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time

part

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part-time

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time

has

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have

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a much higher free

time

. Though

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there are no male statistics on those who are being employed

part

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part-time

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time

or who stay at home, we can see that there is a big jump between those with traditional jobs and those without. Females that are working

full

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full-time

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time

and

part

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part-time

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time

tend to have

lower

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a lower

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leisure

time

with approximately 40 to 50

hours

a week.

Whereas

women who are unemployed or retired

has

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a higher amount of leisure

time

with a leap of around 80

hours

per week.

On the other hand

, the male chart

demonstates

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demonstrates

a significant leap from men who

works

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work

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full

time

, with around 40 to 50

hours

to men who are employed or retired within a range of 80

hours

per week.

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The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.

Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their countries. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism?

Young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults. To want extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child’s development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory for in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that there are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion.