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The charts below show the proportions of consumer expenditure by sector. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of consumer expenditure by sector. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts depict consumer spending changes in seven different categories in 2009 and 2019.
Overall
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, the highest proportions were spent on Food/Drink in both
years
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.
Moreover
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, Entertainment and Smartphones
showed
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have shown
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 a
noticable
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noticeable
 increase through
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years
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the years
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.
Firstly
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, consumers spent mostly on Food/Drink(42%) and Transport(22%). Ten
years
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 later, the figure
of
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for
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 Food/Drink stayed almost the same at 39%, but Transport dropped remarkably to 12%.
Spendings
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Spending
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 on Clothes and Furniture
were
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was
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 at 10% in 2009 and changed to 8% and 11% after the decade respectively. One of the biggest changes was
on
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in
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 Entertainment growing from 8% to 19%, and another one is Smartphones - from 2% to 10%.
In contrast
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, expenditure on books fell considerably to 1% in 2019 compared to 6% ten
years
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 earlier.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer expenditure
  • proportion
  • sector
  • distribution of expenditures
  • trends
  • patterns
  • shifts in spending habits
  • comparisons
  • economic influences
  • cultural influences
  • policy influences
  • expenditure proportions
  • regional differences
  • similarities in consumer spending
  • historical data
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