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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
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The given table illustrates how many
employees
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 and
factories
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 were in 2 different countries (England and Wales) over a
period
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 of 10 years (1851-1901).
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that AT the beginning of the
period
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 the
number
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 of male
employees
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 was higher than females,
although
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 these categories showed a drop to A similar point by the end of the
period
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. Looking at the details,
initially
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, the
number
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 of male and female
employees
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 was 287,100
people
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 and 190,000
people
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 respectively,
whereas
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 the former decreased by almost twice as it was,
while
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 the latter declined to only 30000.
Next,
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all kinds of workers continued to drop until the
period
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 and in 1901 finished at
the
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 similar point (30000). The total
number
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 of
employees
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 demonstrated a fall throughout the
period
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, from 477100
people
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 in 1851 to 61000
people
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 in 1901.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
factories
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 started at 225 in 1851, which continued to rise until 1881 to 721
factories
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, before dropping to 600
factories
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 by the end of the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, factories, period, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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