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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegitables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

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The bar chart illustrates the people who like to eat fruit and vegetables daily in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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, we can see the chart increased slightly
then
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 downward after getting the peak in 2006 and 2007. Looking in more detail, there are no differences for children and men from 2001 to 2003, roughly 12% and 18% respectively, meanwhile, they went up slowly in 2004.
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, women showed a moderate increase in 2004 become 28%. For the remaining data, men and women had the highest peak in 2006 and downward marginally in 2007 and 2008. Meanwhile, children reached a peak in 2007 at about 27% and went down slowly in 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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