7-5, The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

7-5, The charts below show the frequency of being happy in the last four weeks by labour status and by age group.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These charts illustrate the level of happiness by
labor
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status and age groups in the previous four weeks.
Overall
, the pie
chart
displays a similar ratio in both age
range
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ranges
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. The bar
chart
shows
while
workers are in education or training, the majority of them feel happy all/most of the time. In the pie
chart
, more than half of the workers feel all/most of their days are joyful in
50
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-64 and 65-74 groups,
however
, the latter is mildly higher, which is 58.3%.
Furthermore
, in both groups, about a quarter of the employees regard some parts of their days are happy, and less than one-fifth of them experience happiness in little / none of their time. In the bar
chart
, there are above three out of four
of
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employees experience happiness in most of their working time
while
they are training and in education,
in contrast
, when workers are self-employed or retired, these
rate
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rates
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drop to 58.3 and 57% respectively.
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