Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Nowaday
, Correct your spelling
Nowadays
number
of modern forms Change the article
a number
the number
user
has Change preposition
of user
decrease
Change the verb form
decreased
of
society Change preposition
in
communicate
and it Replace the word
communication
efftect on
their social Verb problem
affects
live
. Replace the word
lives
On the other hand
, some people
say that it depend
on one which there a lot of advantange factors on communication and it become part of our new generation.
There are a lot of increasing numbers of Change the verb form
depends
user
on a modern and online platform to communicate with Fix the agreement mistake
users
friend
and family Fix the agreement mistake
friends
such
as Line, Instagram,and Facebook. People
become
using more these applications because it is Verb problem
are
conveniece
and faster. Some applications have Correct your spelling
convenient
convenience
a
interesting function Change the article
an
that
Change preposition
in that
people
can easliy
get in touch with their Correct your spelling
easily
friend
and Fix the agreement mistake
friends
famliy
who live far from them. Correct your spelling
family
For
example
v-live, chat, posting picture, Add a comma
example,
video
call these Correct word choice
and video
fuctions
Correct your spelling
functions
people
can spend Rephrase
where people
a
time with our society. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, these platform
Change the determiner
this platform
these platforms
also
can easliy
make Correct your spelling
easily
a
new Correct article usage
apply
friend
or Fix the agreement mistake
friends
lover
to Fix the agreement mistake
lovers
continues
and Wrong verb form
continue
devolop
Correct your spelling
develop
Correct article usage
a relationship
relationship
.
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
In contrast
, elder people
who lack of
technology are more disappear from community and social lives. Remove the preposition
apply
Older
Add an article
The older
An older
citizen
would Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
be struggle
with Change the verb form
be struggling
new
Add an article
a new
type
of communication and Fix the agreement mistake
types
embarass
to use Correct your spelling
embarrassed
techology
. Correct your spelling
technology
Instead
of online function
they would Add a comma
function,
pefer
to write a paper or talk Correct your spelling
prefer
infront
. Correct your spelling
in front
This
is following
by the Wrong verb form
followed
missunderstand
in Correct your spelling
misunderstanding
teenager
most Fix the agreement mistake
teenagers
of
elder Change preposition
apply
citizen
would not understand new generation things Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
such
as vocabulary, weird emoticon
, and Fix the agreement mistake
emoticons
meme
. Fix the agreement mistake
memes
This
lead
to cause in Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
the
lack of communication.
In conclusion, some Correct article usage
a
people
would love to spend time with there
online community Correct your spelling
their
instead
of their friend
in real life but it depend
on one some of them would love the traditional ways.Change the verb form
depends
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