Theoretical subjects such as mathematics and philosophy are taught in universities but students prefer more practical subjects such as accounting and computer programming. Some people believe theoretical subjects should be abandoned in universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education plays a crucial role in
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life whether they have theoretical knowledge or practical skills.
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want to study
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more practical-based
on
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subjects
instead
of theoretical-based
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ones such
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as maths and philosophy in university
whereas
some claim that theory
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should
be existed
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in colleges. I strongly agree with
this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with,
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theoretical
subjects
cannot provide any
benefits
during
the
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university time
as well as
work time too because
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the student
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student
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students
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should learn more about the
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practical based
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on
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which
are
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high
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demand in the
job
market like accounts and computer programme.
This
kind of skill-based subject certainly
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guarantee
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guarantees
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subjects
,
therefore
, the learners should learn practical
subjects
instead
of theories.
For example
, Indian many universities have more practical
courses
rather than
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theoretical
because
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ones because
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the learner can obtain plenty
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of job
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opportunities in future.
Hence
,
therorotical
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theoretical
subjects
should be abandoned in universities
instead
of more practical
courses
might introduce.
Furthermore
, practical
course
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courses
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can lead to
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a
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personal experience, self-confidence and clear knowledge about the
courses
and
this
can assist
for
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in
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getting more understanding about the
subjects
instead
of studying theory. Therory
courses
only help
for
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enhance more scores in examinations
besides
this
cannot provide any
benefits
in
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students
'
the
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entire
life
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lives
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.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by the Times of India said that
,
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after finishing
colleges
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college
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the practical course
students
instantly got
the
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employment with
higher
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a higher
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salary
package
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packages
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and
who
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those who
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completed
theory
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the theory
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course
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courses
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they
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apply
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suffered to get the
job
.
Therefore
,
theorotical
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theoretical
theoretically
syllabus
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syllabi
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should
be existed
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exist
have existed
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in colleges.
To conclude
,
theorotical
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theoretical
courses
is no more needed because practical
syllabus
give
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gives
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plenty of
benefits
namely
job
opportunity and personal experience.
Hence
, I strongly agree with
this
statement
which
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that
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the
theorotical
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theoretical
courses
should be closed in the educational institutions. I hope
this
tendency drives more
benefits
in the
students
.
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