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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how
maany
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many
 tourist had
visit
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visited
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 a certain area
in
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on
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Caribbean
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a Caribbean
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island
 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
was
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there was
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 an increase
of
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in
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 people visiting
Caribbean
island
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islands
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. There are two types of
visitor
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visitors
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, the first one is who
staying
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stays
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 on the cruise ships and the second is who
staying
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stays
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 on the
island
. In 2010,
visitors
staying
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stayed
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 on cruise ships slightly more than zero but there was
rise
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a rise
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 to 2
million
 people after 7 years. Meanwhile,
visitors
 who
staying
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stayed
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 on the
island
 stood at nearly 1
million
visitors
 and
jump
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jumped
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 just half to 1.5
million
visitiors
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visitors
 in 2017.
However
,
total
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the total
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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 who visited a
Caribbean
island
 kept increasing year by year. They peaked at 3.5
million
 people and the lowest at 1
million
visitors
. There was no
dropping
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drop in
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number
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the number
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 of total
visitors
 who visited
Caribbean
island
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islands
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 between 2010 to 2017.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words caribbean, island, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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