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Describe a time when you talked to a group of people.

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having conversations are
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 part of our lives, it gives us
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to enhance our
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as well as
 broaden our horizons here I would like to single out a special talk that I gave to a group of people. The topic was about how to create a
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 team and become
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good team builder. Without any
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rehearsals
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 stepped into the auditorium and my heart was racing and
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 broke into a swaet.
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 my classmates were supportive and they started to smile which reduced the amount
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 stress and I began to speak. I introduced
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 topic to my classmates with essential key points they needed to consider. First of all stimulating
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 environment where all members can voice their opinions and the importance of listening
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 other and
then
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accordingly
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 I was proud as punch and I delivered my speech fluently In a nutshell, having group talks are
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integral
 part of our lives since it helps us to improve our communication skills and to combat some obstacles.
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coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas more effectively by following a clear, logical structure. Begin with an introduction, followed by distinct paragraphs for each key point, and conclude with a summary. Use transition words and phrases to help your reader follow your line of thought.
task achievement
While you have addressed the topic, more could be done to fully satisfy the task. Explore the topic in depth by providing specific examples, reasons, and results of the talk you gave to your group. Consider elaborating on what you speak about, how the audience responded, and reflect upon what was learned from the experience.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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