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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar plot interprets the data about the proportion of English
people
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 who donated funds to charity by different ages in the two respective years 1990 and 2010. There are five types of age groups
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 as 18 to 25, 26 to 35, 36 to 50, 51 to 65 and more than 65. The activity of giving money to charities was seen as a common thing
of
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for
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 British men and women. The report was given in a gap of two decades. There's a major difference between these two periods.
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, in the
year
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 1990, more
people
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 preferred to donate to charity than in 2010. Neither the younger adult
group
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 nor the mid-adult
group
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 donated less amount than in the
year
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 2010.
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, the youngest
people
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 gave more than one time of money that was given by them in 2010.
Whereas
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, the eldest adult
group
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 and older
people
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 donated more funds when compared to the
year
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 1990.
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, the eldest adult
group
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 stood as the largest donor for the
year
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 2010.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, year, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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