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29/11 Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

29/11 Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates some obvious and mild alterations of a village near London since the middle of the 19th century.
Overall
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, the area is equipped with modern infrastructures which have become urbanized. From 1868 to 1883, the improvement of Chorleywood was limited,
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and
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where
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and
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 the population was comparatively small.
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, when a Chorleywood station was constructed, the state experienced some development works . In 1909, the
railway
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 was introduced, which went across the station of the region,
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, it led to a wealth of cutting-edge conveniences.
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, the end of the
railway
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 was made a bond to a motorway which contributed to the exponential expansion in 1970.
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, there were two main roads established in
this
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 village.
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the
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apply
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one was connected with the
railway
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 , the other was linked with the motorway which created a junction.
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, Chorleywood
park
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Park
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 and
golf
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the golf
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 course were in the heart of the area and the main road, motorway,
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railway
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and railway
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 which
formered
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formed
 like a hash with a top-notch transportation system.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • geographical features
  • 19th century
  • construction
  • public buildings
  • railways
  • infrastructure
  • economic activities
  • housing developments
  • commercial zones
  • environmental concerns
  • deforestation
  • traffic
  • urban sprawl
  • notable architecture
  • landmarks
  • urbanization
  • expansion
  • modernization
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