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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The pie charts
depicts
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 the nutritional value of two
dinner
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 types
such
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 as
medium
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 baked
potato
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 and macaroni.
Overall
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, macaroni has the highest
level
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 of
Carbohydrates
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 and Saturated fat than
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medium
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a medium
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 baked
potato
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.
To begin
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 with,
first
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the first
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dinner
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 type of
medium
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 baked
potato
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 is
concern
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a concern
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, there have 35% proportion of
Carbohydrates
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level
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.
Next,
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the
level
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 of protein is 25%. Glucose and other nutritions are the same amount which is the
persentage
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percentage
 of 15%. To compare
with
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apply
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, macaroni
is
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has
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 the highest
level
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 of
nutritions
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nutrition
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 including
dinner
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 type. It has 52% of
Carbohydrates
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 and saturated fat is about 21%. Glucose and protein are
the
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in the
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 same proportion which is about 11%. To compare
with
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apply
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these two types of
dinner
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Carbohydrates
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carbohydrate levels
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level
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is
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are
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 in the unbalanced food, because
of
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apply
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there have
high
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higher
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 saturated fat than
medium
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 baked
potato
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.
Whereas
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 it is less than half
amount
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the amount
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 of
medium
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 baked
potato
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 about 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, medium, potato, level, carbohydrates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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