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Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent times, it is popularly noticed that social
skills
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 are becoming very valuable. In some industries,
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recruiters feel that the interpersonal competencies of most job seekers have more value than their academic qualifications. I moderately agree with
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 for my point of view.
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 environment. Apart from interacting with clients, an employee needs to demonstrate social competency when relating with their colleagues to foster a healthy
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 space which in turn breeds organisation success.
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, I have noticed that there
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 productivity when we
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 as a team with little to no conflict.
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, in cases when there is a disagreement, there is less efficiency in achieving tasks .
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 proves that good communication which results from good social
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 promotes productiveness in every business establishment.
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, the educational accomplishments of an individual seeking a job are equally essential.
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 is because most professional jobs require a certain amount of
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 and knowledge
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 acquired through learning. To illustrate, only individuals
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 have received academic training as a nurse or a medical doctor should be allowed to carry out medical treatments and procedures for ailing individuals. Anything
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 would result in hazards or loss of life whether the employee has good interpersonal
skills
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 or not. To sum it up,
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, as well as academic eligibility,
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as well as
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 academic eligibility should equally be considered by employers when they decide to hire for a role. I hereby recommend that organisations should arrange training or workshops on good communication among their staff members.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The introduction could more explicitly outline the points that will be discussed, while the conclusion could better summarize your position, reinforcing the reasons for your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Your logical structure is adequate, but improve the flow of ideas. Make sure each paragraph flows naturally to the next, using cohesive devices effectively, like linking words and phrases. Try to avoid abrupt transitions between points.
task achievement
Maintain focus on the prompt throughout your essay and make sure all your points are supported by specific reasons or examples. Each body paragraph should clearly relate to the central topic, which in this case encompasses social skills versus academic qualifications.
task achievement
To fully satisfy the task's requirements, your answer should explore the topic completely, giving a well-balanced view and including relevant, detailed examples. Ensure that your examples are directly linked to your argument and help to reinforce your main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal dynamics
  • Adaptability
  • Teamwork
  • Networking
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Conflict resolution
  • Academic credentials
  • Technical expertise
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Professional development
  • Career advancement
  • Specialization
  • Workplace harmony
  • Customer relations
  • Remote work
  • Digital communication
  • Job competency
  • Holistic assessment
  • Industry-specific skills
  • Work ethic
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