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The line graph illustrates the number of UK people commuting to work every day by car, bus or train from 1970 to 2030

The line graph illustrates the number of UK people commuting to work every day by car, bus or train from 1970 to 2030
The line graph provides us
information
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with information
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 about the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 in the UK commuting to work on a daily basis by three types of transport in 60 year period.
Overall
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, as
it
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can be seen from the graph, the number of
people
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 using cars and trains
are
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is
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 rising gradually during the period given.
On the contrary
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, the usage of the bus has been declining
sligthly
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slightly
. Another
isnteresting
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interesting
 fact
that
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,
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apply
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 the car is
most
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the most
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prefered
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preferred
 kind of transport.
To begin
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 with, in 1970
people
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 the amount of
people
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 started to use
the
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apply
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car
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cars
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 about 5
million
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 and will
be reached
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reach
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 a point of 9
million
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 by 2030 which illustrates
a
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apply
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considerable growth.The same tendency can
by
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be by
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 2030 respectively.
By contrast
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, there
were
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was
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 a steady fall from 4
million
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people
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 in 1970 to 3
million
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 predicted by 2030.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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