An increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. Why is this the case, and what solutions are possible?

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Nowadays
, there is a growth in the supply
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consumer goods and it has a negative impact on
environment
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the environment
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. The essay will examine the causes related to
this
tendency and the measures
could
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be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety of different causes for
this
matter of
this
phenomenon.
To begin
with,
due to
the increase
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the world population, people need more
resources
in order to produce goods.
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,
according to
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from
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Economic University,
1
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% increase in the population
results
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5% increase in the supply for the market. Another contributing factor to mention is that humans are exploiting more
resources
than they are supposed to.
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,
according to
researches
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, the proportion of the amount of natural
resources
that are utilized by
human
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humans
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and the available amount of
resources
that
natural
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nature
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can offer us is 1.8 in 2021,
that
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is much higher than
the
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past and it is detrimental to the process of
nature
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natural
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reproduction. Despite
of
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these circumstances, there are several actions that governments could take to solve the problems.
Firstly
, an effective solution would be to raise awareness of recycling. A reason for
this
is that consumers can stop buying newly made products
therefore
companies don't have to take advantage of natural
resources
. An example
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this
is that as stated in
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Times, there is a website for mothers to sell their baby's clothes because clothes for babies can be costly since children grow fast
therefore
they don't wear
it
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for too long. In
addtional
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addition
, it solves the the problem of fast fashion which
also
has a negative on the environment and it is more
economic
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for many families. In conclusion, the problem of
growing
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in
the
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consumers
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consumer
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goods production is unlikely to be entirely eliminated in the short term.
However
, various solutions can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the effects it is having on the current society.
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