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The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates different life aspects which European youth expect to change over the following two decades.
Overall
, the bulk of the young
assumes
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assume
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 that
people
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people's
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 communication will be an improvement aspect
while
 others
seems
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seem
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 to get worse after 20 years. It is
also
 noteworthy that health and
air
quality
 gain nearly the same expectations from youngsters.
To begin
 with,
it is clear that
people
 communication is the only section that received over 50% predictions from the young to be better in the future, three times higher than that of
air
quality
. Coming next is food
quality
, with about 47% voted for its development in the next two decades.
On the other hand
, health,
air
quality
 and water
quality
 are the aspects, which is anticipated to get worse than they are
then
. Specifically, the difference between the proportion of health and water
quality
 is negligible, with 58% and 60%
young
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of young
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people
think
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thinking
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 that they are not able to improve in the next few years, respectively.
Lastly
, only over 20%
people
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of people
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who participate
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participate
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participated
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 in the survey
chooses
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chose
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air
quality
 as an improvement area, ranking
last
 on the mentioned list.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, air, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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