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For some people, learning in a group is the most effective method while others prefer one-on-one instruction. Discuss both ideas. What is your opinion?

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People
 think that
leraning
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learning
 in a
group
 is the most effective ,
while
 others consider that learning
individuall
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individual
individually
 is
most
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the most
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 effective method .We will discuss
this
 essay in both the ideas . First,learning
in
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one-on-one saves time and
its
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is
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 most
usefull
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useful
. We can study
by
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on
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 our own at any time and
any where
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.
Moreover
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 there will be no side talks and we can learn
bit
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 faster .The student will get more focus on the particular subject and
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 to cover the lesson as soon as possible . Individual learning can gain extra
knowledge
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, in private classes
the
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people
 can clear
the
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 doubts and clarification through the instructor .It leads to more connection between the
people
 and the instructor because the classes will be
alloted
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allowed
allocated
allotted
 for one person only .So
its
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it is
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easy
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an easy
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 way to communicate and learn .
On the other hand
, learning in
group
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the group
a group
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 has lots of
benefit
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benefits
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.They can get
knowledge
 of others and they can solve
the
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problems through discussing with
group
 members.
This
 can boost
the
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 thinking skills and they can be active .The
people
 will get motivated
while
 learning through
group
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the group
a group
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 .They can get different ideas and methods from others ,
this
 is useful to improve their skill.
For
example
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 learning in
group
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a group
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 can get more creative thinking ability ,
different
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 ideas at the same time they can improve
the
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knowledge
 .The
people
 can solve the problems in different ways .So learning in
group
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a group
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 is more
efffective
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effective
. I conclude ,
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that learning
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 in
group
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a group
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 is more effective than learning through
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an individual
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.compain
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helps
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help
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 to improve
the
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knowledge
 ,bring creativity to learners and
helps
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help
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 to gain
knowledge
.
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Task Achievement
In terms of task response, ensure that you address all parts of the prompt fully. This includes discussing both views on group learning versus individual learning, and providing a clear opinion. Your opinion was provided, but the other views need to be more fully explored and examples should be specific and clearly linked to the points made.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay needs to be logically structured with a clear introduction, supporting paragraphs, and a conclusion. While an attempt to segment ideas was made, transitions between ideas were not always smooth and the overall flow could be improved. Use cohesive devices effectively to link ideas and to signpost the reader through your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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