The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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chart illustrates the choices of Anthropology alumni from a University after graduation
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their bachelor's degree. The table shows information about how much salaries were gained by the anthropologists after working for five years.
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, more than
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half alumni of Anthropology are full-time workers.
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with, the Anthropology graduates had a choice to work
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after finishing their university degree
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for 52%.
However
, only 5% of the alumni became part-timers and continued their master's degrees. After dedicating within five years, the anthropologists working as freelance consultants, as
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and
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in private organizations were paid 100,000+
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40%, 50% and 30% respectively.
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