Some people think schools should group pupils according to their academic ability, but others believe pupils with different abilities should be educated together. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Traditionally,
students
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in the same school, but there's a controversial issue
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students
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scores
to
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seperate
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separate
the groups. First of all, it is
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appropriate for
students
to be
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according to
their levels.
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is because
this
way can help
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students
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certain subjects.
For example
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students
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simple. If they stay in the easy class to
study
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students
.
As a result
, these kinds of
students
were grouped to
study
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better than them, their academic potential would be inspired and become
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better. It is beneficial to
students
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their scores.
However
, it is
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method for most
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students
because if schools pay more attention
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developing honor
students
, the other
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scores
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The benefits of putting
students
with different abilities is that they can help
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each other and have
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together.
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students
who
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well and some
students
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is that
this
method would reduce
students
' confidence, who are not good at studying.
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reason is that they can
according to
different activities from different
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students
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such
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difficulty
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math and there are
students
who are good at it.
Then
, those who cannot solve math are able to ask
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students
.
Therefore
,
students
have various skills,
such
as dancing, singing, studying
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etc. They are able to
study
others' skills to improve themselves. In conclusion,
students
should not be
seperately
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separately
separated
because people have their advantages and disadvantages. They should learn from others' strong points to offset one's
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.Some people think schools should group pupils
according to
their academic ability, but others believe pupils with different abilities should be educated together. Discuss both views and give your opinion
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