You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask your friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter : Give details of your study plan Explain why you want to take up the part time job Suggest how your friend could help you find a job
Hello Preet,
I hope you are in radiant health and best of spirits.I am thrilled to share the news that I am coming to Canada next month.
To begin
with, I got selected an
Animation course at the University of British Columbia. As you are aware from my college days , animation interests me . I
am excited to start my journey. I have already booked the flight tickets.It is basically a Change preposition
for an
one year
course and classes will be 3 days a week from 9am to 3 PM. I have a lot of spare time to do Add a hyphen
one-year
part time
job and make money.
SinceAdd a hyphen
part-time
,
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apply
study
loan is taken by me ,I have to repay it in Correct article usage
a study
next
2 years.I Correct article usage
the next
will
be gladWrong verb form
would
,
if you could suggest Remove the comma
apply
me
some Change preposition
to me
part time
Add a hyphen
part-time
jobs
.Furthermore
, you know international students have to pay the next semester
fees and I Change noun form
semester's
dont
want to be a burden on my parents,as they have already spent so much on me.
As you Correct your spelling
don't
are
in Wrong verb form
have been
Canda
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Canada
since
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for
last
4 years , please suggest if there is any website to register for Correct article usage
the last
jobs
, it would be helpful.Before I leave India, I will start applying for jobs
. I have an
expertise in doing Correct article usage
apply
jobs
in grocery stores , I will catch up easily there.I would be thankful to you.
I am excited to meet you in canada
and study in my favourite country.
See you soon.
Best regards.
PulkitChange the capitalization
Canada
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central theme and avoid mixing multiple ideas. Structure your letter with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each bullet point separately, and a conclusion.
logical structure
Work on establishing a more logical structure by introducing your study plans and intentions earlier in the letter, and then explaining the need for a part-time job, followed by a request for assistance in finding employment.
greeting and closing
Use a polite and appropriate greeting and closing in your letter. For instance, it is generally advised to avoid overly colloquial expressions in a formal letter.
task achievement
Ensure you address all components of the task, but also stay focused on each one separately. It is advisable to elaborate a little more on the type of part-time job desired and why it is important to you, besides the financial aspect.
suitable writing tone
Maintain an appropriate tone throughout the letter, which should be respectful and formal, aligning with the purpose of the letter. Avoid overly casual language and contractions where possible.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.