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The line graph illustrates the number of UK people commuting to work every day by car, bus or train from 1970 to 2030

The line graph illustrates the number of UK people commuting to work every day by car, bus or train from 1970 to 2030
The line graph provides information about the
number
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 of UK
people
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 commuting to work every day using three kinds of transportation
such
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 as car, bus, and train between 1970 and 2030.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 using cars and trains rose gradually from 1970 to 2030. Meanwhile,
people
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 who took the bus decreased slowly over 2030. In more detail, in 1970 the total
number
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 of
people
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 that commute by car stood at 5
million
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 and went up moderately to 7
million
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 in 2000. After that, it remained stable until 2010 and climbed up until 2030. The
number
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 of UK commuters
are
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is
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 predicted to reach 9
million
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 in 2030. From 1970 to 2010, the
number
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 of commuters using the train increased slowly from 2
million
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 to 3
million
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.
Then
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, it rose significantly from 3
million
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 in 2010 to 5
million
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 in 2030.
Conversely
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,
people
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 who use buses
declained
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declined
 steadily from 4
million
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 in 1930 to 3
million
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 in 2020.
In addition
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, the total remained stable between 2020 to 2030.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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