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Band 5.5

The diagrams show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010

The diagrams show a museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010
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The two maps depict some obvious and mild changes
comparison
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 of the
museum
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 between 1990 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the
museum
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 experienced some shifts after two decades. With regard to radical shifts, a new coffee in the
south-east
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southeast
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 in 2010 at the removal of the cottage on the
south-west
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southwest
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 corner of the
museum
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,
while
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 the exist which used to be located adjacent to
cottage
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the cottage
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 was relocated to the
south-east
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southeast
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 of the
museum
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. To the opposite across a path were a rectangular car park and garden, but the garden underwent a conversion into
car
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a car
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 park over the period of 20 years. In terms of small changes, the store in the
north-west
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northwest
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 corner of the map went through a significant extension. Meanwhile, the exhibition area was narrowed down to an L-shape
make
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 room for
shop
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a shop
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.
Finally
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, no response detected records alternations in the path in the heart of the art gallery and the car park in the
north-east
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northeast
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 of the map.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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