The graph below show the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012
The line graph displays how the population of various
turtles
changed in India from 1980 to 2012. Overall
, all species
were equal in index
in the beginning and, Add an article
the index
total
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the total
all
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for all
species
have fluctuated over the
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time
. However
, it went up slightly in
the end of Change the preposition
at
time
. Meanwhile, Olive Ridley turtles
could achieved
the highest influx among others.
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achieve
turtles
were 100 indexed in 1980 as
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other
two types, Correct article usage
the other
although
it surpassed the number remaining types in 1986 as it was nearly 11. This
species
then
rocketed to almost 135 in 1997, marking its maxium
number Correct your spelling
maximum
thereafter
. Then
following a series of fluctautions
, Correct your spelling
fluctuations
finally
the count was approximately 130 in 2012. During the whole time
period, the total population index
was fluctuating
as it increased from 10 indices Wrong verb form
fluctuated
since
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in
from
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to
index
.
Green turtles
were the most prominent species
until 1984, as it was nearly index
of 105, however
, this
fluctuated over the time
course while
it remained as the second highest species
from 1987 to 2012. At
2012, it declined Change preposition
In
up
to Change preposition
apply
index
of 90. Correct article usage
an index
Leather back
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Leatherback
turtles
were equal with other
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others
to
in population Change preposition
apply
at
1987 Change preposition
in
as
but it had a steep drop down Correct word choice
apply
thereafter
. Its count finally
was 60 which was the least among all others.Submitted by tlakshani005 on
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