The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1
The given bar graph shows the data about the proportions of folks who
spends
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more on the aspects that are in three types of
expenditure
.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that most people
spends
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on food items and
entertainmenty
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entertainment
purpose,
wheareas
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whereas
the least interest is seen in
the
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apply
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acomadation
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accommodation
purposes
particularly
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, particularly
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in the 61-75 age
of
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people
as well as
76+ aged folks. It is very informative. Well, there are
an
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a
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of lot changes on the whole.
To begin
with, in
the the
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term
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terms
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of age group under 30,
the
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most of the
expenditure
occurs behalf of
accomadation
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accommodation
purpose
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purposes
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. Nearly, the
amount
of money
spends
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spent
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on entertainment is less than the
resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
and hotels.
Furthermore
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the
amount
of
expenditure
spends on
accomadation
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accommodation
is approximately
same
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the same
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for the age group of 31-45 and 45-60.
However
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continuously the
amount
of
expenditure
drops down. Rolling towards the rest of the information,
expenditure
amount
of food and drinks constantly increasing. Meanwhile, Food and drinks
reachs
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reaches
reach
the highest position
of
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on
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the chart.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, amount with synonyms.
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