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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The rendered set of maps illustrates the changes that have occurred in the infrastructure of the public libraries 20 years ago and changes in the central Library today.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that a number of changes have taken place
such
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 as the reading
room
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 being replaced by a computer
room
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, the lecture
room
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 taking the place of children's
books
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 and others.
According to
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 the given data, the main attraction of a community library was CDs, videos, computer and games facilities which is estimated to change in the upcoming days by sort of new facilities
such
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 as storytelling events, children's fiction
books
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along with
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 sitting areas.
Moreover
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, in the northern
as well as
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 in the southern directions there were tables and chairs in the centre of the floor which will
be vanished
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 in the future.
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, entry into the library will be unchanged in the upcoming days. Moving
further
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, the enquiry desk and others have been shifted by the cafe. Meanwhile, adult fiction
books
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 will be changed into all reference
books
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 in the West and in the East side adult fiction
books
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 have been added
along with
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 self-service machines.
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, the reading
room
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 has been estimated to be replaced with a computer de
room
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with, such".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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