Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Tourism around the
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is developing and the number of tourists visiting
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the
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is
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increasing.
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has led people to create two groups, one who so supports the host
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, that should accept diverse cultures for those
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the other group believes that the tourists should explore and follow local customs and traditions. I support the second statement. The
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should be well prepared in terms of tourist guides to receive
visitors
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from around the
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. They should be well informed about
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the culture
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and tradition of the visitor who is visiting the
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as per those who
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cultural differences.
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helps them to explore different cultures of the outside
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within the
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.
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advantageous towards guests, who need not have to explore and get necessary information to avoid cultural shock.
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, the other group is against it. Understanding the meaning of tourist and their purpose of visiting , they really want to know something about the place they visit. Considering
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purpose having guides with all the information of their own
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means the
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’s pride.
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ultimate intention of visiting the
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can be fulfilled by experiencing the diverse culture of the
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.
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, people across the
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visit Bhutan to learn about its distinct culture, where they wear traditional clothes and visit festivals. They say only
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, they feel complete. In
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context, with the interests of
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, the host should be prepared to offer them choices.
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my writing, the host
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is responsible for the visitor’s choices. They should treat the
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not the
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who have to accept the cultural diversity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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