The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
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The pie charts compare the ratio of
time
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spent in various activities in the
day
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of working adults in 1958 and 2008. All in all, people at work slept less and worked more when compared to the past. People
also
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spend less
time
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on social activities and
instead
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stay at home more often. Back in 1958, working adults spent equivalent
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sleeping and working, both taking one-third of a
day
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. People
also
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used
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around one-fifth of a
day
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to go out with friends and families, which is more than double the
time
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relaxing at home. Other activities
such
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as travelling to work ,hobbies and playing sports took the remaining 8%. But after five decades,
although
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sleeping and working still took
two third
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two-thirds
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of a
day
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of working adults in total, the
time
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used for sleeping dropped to one-fourth of a
day
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.
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, the
time
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spent on relaxing at home was more than double
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the 6%
time
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for going out, which was the opposite of that in 1958. The
time
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spent on hobbies and sports remained the same though,
while
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that on travelling to work experienced a 4-fold increase.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, day with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • technological advancements
  • leisure activities
  • household chores
  • gender roles
  • modern lifestyle
  • fast food trends
  • sleep patterns
  • health and well-being
  • societal impact
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