The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
bar chart provides information about how the proportion of Verb problem
apply
people
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were
born in Correct pronoun usage
who were
Australia
and Use synonyms
people
who were born outside it Use synonyms
had
changed in percentage between 1995 and
2010. These numbers had been measured in urban, rural and Unnecessary verb
apply
town
in and outside Fix the agreement mistake
towns
Australia
.
At Use synonyms
the
first glance, it is clearly seen that the Correct article usage
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numbr
of Correct your spelling
number
population
in and outside Add an article
the population
Australia
in rural areas had dramatically decreased between the given years. Use synonyms
Besides
, the number of Linking Words
people
being born in Use synonyms
the
towns outside Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
Australia
in 1995 and 2010 had been Use synonyms
stabled
.
The interesting point is that the Replace the word
stable
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
being born in cities of Use synonyms
Australia
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had
Wrong verb form
has
raised
about 15% Verb problem
risen
between
the given years.Change preposition
over
On the other hand
, these statistics outside Linking Words
Astralia
in cities illustrate more amount of increased percentage which was 20%. As is observed, the most range of changes involves the rural areas Correct your spelling
Australia
which
located outside Correct pronoun usage
apply
Australia
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,
and experienced Remove the comma
apply
Linking Words
such
a falling gradient which is almost 30% Correct quantifier usage
apply
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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