You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter remind your employer what the course was about explain why the course was useful to you in your work suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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Dear Mr. Ariani I am writing to give you
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feedback with regard to the communicational skill course that I recently
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in, as you requested. Since
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the purpose of
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course was mainly to enhance our soft skills in a working environment, most of its lessons were
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by a professional psychologist. He
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introduced
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newest techniques for
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with people from different social classes. I find
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very useful for me because the fact that I
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as a member of the representative group of our company and
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skills would be of significant importance for us to be able to persuade our customers to buy our products. So I think others from our department should join
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course as well.
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, courses like
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will not be beneficial for those who work in other sectors like the production lane. For them, I believe, learning hard skills would be of prime importance. So I think you might need to provide them with more useful courses
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their special jobs. I look forward to hearing from you about any
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regard. Yours Faithfully, Arash Abbasi
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for enhanced clarity. While the letter did delineate the ideas, clearer paragraphing could further improve the coherence of the text.
task achievement
Include a specific example or detail about how the communication skills gained from the course have already been applied to your role or how you envision applying them. This will strengthen the explanation of the course's usefulness.
task achievement
Avoid grammatical errors such as 'I am writing to give you a feedback,' which should be 'I am writing to give you feedback.' Pay close attention to article use and pluralization to avoid minor errors that can impact the overall score.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a formal tone consistently throughout the letter. Be careful with informal contractions or casual language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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