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Death penalty is still practiced in jurisdiction system of many countries. Some people believe that this type of punishment should be abolished. However, others are of opposite opinion. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your own opinion.

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While
 it's believed by some that dying punishment has to be ceased in some nations,others claim it is not justified to use
this
 type of cost.
This
 essay will delve into the details of both points of view
in addition
 to my opinion that will be illustrated. To commence with, vigorous sanction is still in action in some countries.
This
 is because some lawlessness
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 not be able to handled by other legalization. To illustrate
this
, in order to counter some illegal perilous issues like killing, bank attacking as well and smuggling the punishments have to be extremely vigorous.
Hence
, what the governments have to do is
decease
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 torture. Take my country as a clear example, the discipline for The Whole given fraud is loss of life. All of these contribute to hindering the number of lawlessness.
Nevertheless
, the other pattern can be seen in other territories that do not use
this
 trial as a fair fine, the number of wrongdoing is on an upward trend. So as to the aforementioned reasons, It seems to me that
this
 kind of punishment has to be rendered in the legalization system to overcome difficulties that are raised by unjustified atrocity.
However
, despite
this
, some people say that it's not fair to end the life of one because of crime whatever he did.
Consequently
. there were some regulations brought in rule to tackle aggressive corruption.
For instance
, in Algeria, people can receive up to 25 years in jail If they commit vigorous
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 as that
were
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 mentioned above.
Nevertheless
, I am inclined to think neither because it's useless in some nations
although
,the punisher spend a great deal of year in prison. In a nutshell, after a thorough analysis of
this
 subject, it is obvious that
although
 some people claim that prison punishment is not fair enough, some believe that death is the best approach in order to tackle issues that extent caused by weak punishments.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure clear and accurate use of language to avoid ambiguity and confusion. Frequent grammatical errors and misuse of vocabulary can significantly hinder communication.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize ideas logically and clearly, making sure paragraphs are well-structured with main ideas introduced followed by supporting details.
Coherence and Cohesion
Provide an introduction and conclusion that clearly state the topic and the writer's overall position, without introducing new ideas in the conclusion.
Task Response
Fully develop your response to cover all parts of the task, ensuring you discuss both sides of the issue and provide your own viewpoint.
Task Response
Develop clear and comprehensive ideas, avoiding overly complex or unclear sentences. Simplicity and clarity often result in a higher level of communication.
Task Response
Use relevant, specific examples to support your claims. General or irrelevant details can undermine the strength of your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • jurisdiction
  • deterrent
  • morality
  • rehabilitation
  • wrongful convictions
  • innocence
  • retribution
  • ethical dilemmas
  • life sentence
  • judicial system
  • human rights
  • lethal injection
  • electric chair
  • justice
  • penal system
  • recidivism
  • appeal process
  • clemency
  • miscarriage of justice
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