The graph shows information about spending on electronic goods from 2001 to 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows information about spending on electronic goods from 2001 to 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features of, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The 3-line graph represents information about the huge amount of money people pay to purchase electronic goods through 3 channels, over a decade from 2001 till 2010 , calculated in US dollars.It was found that
sales
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increased to different degrees through 3 channels After taking a closer look at the details, it turns out that
sales
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of electronics and appliances started at $80 billion in 2001. After three years, the amount of
sales
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increased for all channels.
This
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increase
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continued until it reached its peak in 2008, estimated at between 120 and 137 billion for both offline and retail
sales
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. From 2008 to 2010, these
sales
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declined and
then
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recovered.
On the other hand
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,
e-commereic
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e-commerce
sales
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followed different patterns. In 2001, the number of
sales
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reached zero, and in fact, they started from there. There is a slight, negligible
increase
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over the four years.
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there was a slight steady
increase
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until the peak was
finally
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reached and the
increase
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reached 20 billion.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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