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The table shows the percentages of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone.

The table shows the percentages of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone.
#percentages #people #phones #features #phone
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The chart
give
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gives
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 information about the number of
the
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apply
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people with telephones who use
for
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them for
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a
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different purposes on their phones from 2006 to 2010. As can be seen from the chart people used all their phones only to make a call to others between 2006,2008 and 2010. The least used phone feature was record video in 2008
buy
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but
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 it increased dramatically from 9 % to 35% during 2 years. The percentage of
the
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apply
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taking photos grew minimally
by
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from 66% to 71%, from 71% to 76% between 2006 and 2010. The proportion of the send messages and
recieve
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receive
 messages started to grow from 73% to 75%, from 75% to 79% between 2006,2008 and 2010.
Play
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The
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 games feature of the phones wasn’t popular in 2006. The percentage of the play games was 17%,42% and 41% during 4 years .
And
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Then
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then
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 the number of
the
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apply
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play music
feature
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features
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 rose gradually from 12% to 18% , from 18% to 26% in 2006,2008 and 2010 respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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