some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation discuss both views and give your own opinion.
On
the contemporary era, Change preposition
In
one
of the most significant issues is our acceptance toward
different situations, especially the hard ones. People usually Change preposition
of
expose
to disparate Wrong verb form
exposed
situation
in their Fix the agreement mistake
situations
work place
or about their income, but their method to confront Correct your spelling
workplace
this
issue could be different.
It is an undeniable fact that the
modern life, in spite of all Correct article usage
apply
benefits
, has enormous drawbacks, too. Correct pronoun usage
its benefits
One
of the problems for
living in Change preposition
of
this
world is dependency
of human Add an article
a dependency
the dependency
to
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on
his
job and Correct pronoun usage
their
his
satisfaction after habited to Correct pronoun usage
their
the
bad situation; Correct article usage
a
for example
, consider all polices who have to work all the time for bringing
safety to Change preposition
to bring
the
society, but who care about their problems like shortage of salary and over-working? Absolutely no Correct article usage
apply
one
, and this
issue won't be solved in the future,
unless the own Remove the comma
apply
polices
make demonstrations against Change the verb form
police
government
and their problems to solve in the parliament or other law courts.
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the government
On the other hand
, the other group argue that we should make an effort to alter unsatisfactory by ourselves. This
group are more liberal and are believe
more Wrong verb form
believes
to
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in
democracy
values. So if they Replace the word
democratic
would
have any problem, they just easily indicate it and if it Verb problem
apply
would be
necessary, they fight for it; Wrong verb form
is
for instance
, when university students have any problem in my country, they amplify their voice and shout their
rights easily because they profoundly believe that they should acquire what is belongs to them.
As far as I am concerned, we should not underestimate the power of Change preposition
for their
group
. when a person shouts lonely, no Add an article
the group
a group
one
would care
about him, Wrong verb form
cares
while
when a huge queue of protests stand
for their rights, they Correct subject-verb agreement
stands
could
change and refurbish anything.
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can
Overall
, I believe that we should trust to
each other and try to stand Change preposition
apply
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coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices and paragraphs clearly to achieve a logical organization of information.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples and clearer explanations to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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